gekogoth009
Chibi Guardian
so I am breakable................
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Post by gekogoth009 on Dec 29, 2004 18:18:57 GMT 10
Like a drill,these words screw demonic vision of faith,into my dreams,as i stare,into your cold blank eyes,I fall with out any signs of stoping,I know your happy seeing my crumble with all this weight on my shoulders,its like 1 million and 2 boulders,your laughing is no help,but its you,i should not expect anything-els,but im a fool,and i should not weep over my loses,but im a fool,im so shallow,im so hollow,i try to fill myself up,and try to get back up on my feet,but its just a goal i can not reach---MY NEWIST WORK
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gekogoth009
Chibi Guardian
so I am breakable................
Posts: 73
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Post by gekogoth009 on Dec 29, 2004 18:25:54 GMT 10
Im so cold and dark,bleek and shallow,my shadow is the onlything that knows existence to me,the rest just dont leave me be,so i block them out,like the depression,and pain,that my life was filled and riddled with,somtimes these thoughts get a hold of me,and consume my mind in blood and hopless faith,and another back turned to my face,i reach out but no-one hears,so I scream till my throat ruptures and i cough up blood,cause i have so much,due to being kicked back down so many times,time and time agan iv tried,and only to the outcome of my mind & heart decaying even more so
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Post by Chibi Jen on Dec 29, 2004 19:10:10 GMT 10
Umm.. it's kinda hard to see it as a poem when there's no verse, stanza and etc... Is it possible you sort them in those, instead of like a prose? Thanks.
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gekogoth009
Chibi Guardian
so I am breakable................
Posts: 73
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Post by gekogoth009 on Dec 29, 2004 19:18:51 GMT 10
it wont let me go on to the next line
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Post by Chibi Jen on Dec 29, 2004 20:49:33 GMT 10
.. serious? Doesnt it work if you hit the [ENTER] key?
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gekogoth009
Chibi Guardian
so I am breakable................
Posts: 73
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Post by gekogoth009 on Dec 30, 2004 5:27:28 GMT 10
yeah,I got realy mad last night,but I just figured i would write them like that till i could figure out whats up with teh enter key
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ShadowSpinner
Starlight Chibi
hm. whats this feeling? hate? love? hurt? kindness?
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Post by ShadowSpinner on Dec 30, 2004 5:53:41 GMT 10
wow1 thats deep...really good! Im jelouse(sp?)
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gekogoth009
Chibi Guardian
so I am breakable................
Posts: 73
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Post by gekogoth009 on Dec 30, 2004 6:07:18 GMT 10
thankies ^_^ and whats with the "(sp)" i could only think of sm,self mutalation,or simple plan >.<
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ShadowSpinner
Starlight Chibi
hm. whats this feeling? hate? love? hurt? kindness?
Posts: 208
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Post by ShadowSpinner on Dec 30, 2004 6:10:07 GMT 10
it means spelling/....like check the spelling..
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gekogoth009
Chibi Guardian
so I am breakable................
Posts: 73
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Post by gekogoth009 on Dec 30, 2004 6:53:13 GMT 10
o0o0o,well about that,i usaly write my poems when im depressed,so all i can think about is my pain or w.e u want to call it,so i leave it like to know that i was ether depressed or happy writeing it
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ShadowSpinner
Starlight Chibi
hm. whats this feeling? hate? love? hurt? kindness?
Posts: 208
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Post by ShadowSpinner on Dec 30, 2004 7:02:47 GMT 10
im better at writeing storys..im not so good at poems...i think i have put one on here..
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gekogoth009
Chibi Guardian
so I am breakable................
Posts: 73
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Post by gekogoth009 on Dec 30, 2004 8:07:20 GMT 10
ill defintly look for it,and poetry is somehting no-one could be good at,its all about peoples oppinons,but im being hypocritical cause I think my poems are very very bad,but iv bin writeing for 3 years now,so i know i have to be a lil good ^_^ just practice,eventualy youll be good
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gekogoth009
Chibi Guardian
so I am breakable................
Posts: 73
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Post by gekogoth009 on Dec 30, 2004 16:18:23 GMT 10
Im the cronic shadow,the crow on your cross,I will always lend a hand,and the sands of life,hit the wall like a well thrown knife,Im usaly the barer of bad or useless news,always cant fill these shoes,always the creeping death bringing more then i can handle,but it was all based on the hand that rocked the cradle
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ShadowSpinner
Starlight Chibi
hm. whats this feeling? hate? love? hurt? kindness?
Posts: 208
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Post by ShadowSpinner on Dec 31, 2004 0:04:14 GMT 10
wow....YOU ARE REALLY GOOD
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gekogoth009
Chibi Guardian
so I am breakable................
Posts: 73
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Post by gekogoth009 on Jan 1, 2005 7:02:01 GMT 10
As the moon shines upon my final memorie,I try to hold on to this lovely place,but the pain this worl brings,is too much for one man to handle,like a buring candle,i slowly melt away,getting lost in this horid sway of essence decay,the world around me is passing me by,im to scared to take a risk,Iv took them many times befor,but i just dont know if i can take any more,these mucles are saw,these bones ache,and these ppl I can not take (thanks ss)
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