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Post by Chibi Jen on Oct 10, 2004 22:22:19 GMT 10
Okay, I'm commenting only on the parts I've read so far~ no, I'm not finished XD I think Midori seems like a pretty full rounded character, which is good to see since she seems realistic (I can imagine her) Good use of technical jargon which confuses the heck out of me ^^, but that makes it sound authentic Pretty well written Blu; for a genre I'm not so interested in ^^;; I'll read more in spare time!
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Post by Blu on Oct 10, 2004 22:33:16 GMT 10
Any jargon you don't understand plz just put it into a list then I can try to explain it to ya ^^
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Post by Blu on Oct 12, 2004 8:59:35 GMT 10
Did you read all of it?? lol I'll be amazed if you did and you still say that lol.
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Post by Death Soldier on Oct 12, 2004 9:15:21 GMT 10
I'm sure Blu was excited to receive a reply with some feedback on his writing. Any other comments? I hope you've actually read it.... . <<To Sf: Please do not spam, I have noticed your limited responses to others' writings as well. >> P.s: A note to Blu: I promise I'll read your writing after the HSC exams and provide you with my thoughts. From what CJen commented, I hope I won't be confused with the jargon.
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Post by Blu on Oct 12, 2004 19:17:22 GMT 10
lol, Don'e worry yourself too much about reading it if you don't like the first few, I just wanted to showcase my writings somewhere - - and here's a very good place to put it up ^^
I would put up (the older) Kyriake's file up, but I believe I've lost some of it (still foraging through my older documents where the year 9, 10 and 11 crap are)
There were some other ones which were good - - but I think (most of) the best went into Midori's story (but possibly with another character called Gabriel, but those files are lost - - stuck on my last hard-drive which failed on me >.<)
Its kinda different for my genre, and for some reason I was obsessed with developing a extra-worldly character. But then again, more emotion went into that work, so it's bound to be able to create a better atmosphere then some of my more lastest stuff.
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Post by sailorfire on Oct 12, 2004 19:36:21 GMT 10
it is full of cool ideas and it is very interesting and yes, i read it all. and i read it 3 times too...
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Post by Blu on Oct 12, 2004 20:08:42 GMT 10
*jaw drops*
You are serz... omg. That's a lot of reading. Even I can't read all that in one session.
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Post by sailorfire on Oct 12, 2004 22:30:53 GMT 10
to ds: i deleted that short and well not descriptive comment and um i am sure i was not spamming but in anycase, i will just play safe... to blu : yes i am serious and i love the whole thing too. i read it again 3 times... but i still don't understand certain parts , but that might be me... i don't understand all the technical jargon...
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Post by Blu on Oct 12, 2004 23:10:32 GMT 10
Hehe, that's why I ask you what you don't understand ^^ and I'll explain it best I can ^^
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