Death Soldier
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Post by Death Soldier on Sept 25, 2004 16:11:33 GMT 10
It's pretty good ;D Keep working on it... is that girl at the start with Luna Minako?
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Post by Digital Leonardo on Sept 25, 2004 16:43:38 GMT 10
^^You'll have to see~
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Post by sailorfire on Sept 25, 2004 17:07:09 GMT 10
very good... romance, tragedy and mystery... wonder who the mystery person is. ..
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Post by Chibi Jen on Oct 13, 2004 12:00:45 GMT 10
Woah... exciting ^_^ That girl is definately Minako! Lol.. There's no doubt about it.. the description of her hair colour, the red bow, the uniform (without the bow, but a tie) and is even referred to as the "Princess" XD This is interesting... It's not the same as the original Haha.. I feel so good as a reader to know what's actually happening and who they are..lol hahaa... FUNNY!! Sailormoon? O.o? I like this.. it makes it seem more realistic Really good, I enjoyed that. Just a few minor spelling errors such as "sing" instead of "sign" and "Cloths" instead of "clothes" "They" "me" lol.. seems like you wanna make V the heroine this time ^_^ *Phew.. I'm done with reading..hehe.. I should be studying at this point ^_~ I hope you like the feedback.
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Post by Digital Leonardo on Oct 13, 2004 12:28:44 GMT 10
Thanks Jen~ I love those who good indepth. Yes I know errors over error thats why I got myself an editor! You guys were my test subjects!
Once I get all the errors will be removed, I will fix my posts and add epiosde 2 and 3! When you guys are done all your test I would love for some tips when my episodes come out^^
Yeah... I want Sailor V to get some glory... and what do people think of the 'princess' and luna working together?
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Post by Chibi Jen on Oct 13, 2004 12:38:35 GMT 10
Umm.. I'm not too sure if there's going to be an "Artemis" or not...lol
I think V already has glory ^^ In fact.. I also found Usagi to be quite lacking the qualities that make her likable.. o.o
I liked her character (personality) more in Live Action, than she appears here. I mean she's nice and all.. with the beginning talking to Naru, but then she becomes too overally scared? o.O
This didn't seem very friendly ^_^
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