sailorcomett - In The Sea

[Sailor Comett]

[glow=darkorchid,2,300]In The Sea

The peaceful sounds of the waves
Softly breaking on softer sand
Fill my head with memories
That had been taken
With the tide.

As a child
I’d loved to play
Jumping and diving through waves
Breaking the surface with a loud splash
And surfacing with a wet face and a wide smile.

Except the occasional whisper of a wave
The sea is now serene, still and silent
Hiding in its dark, lonely depths
My childhood memories
Like a secret kept

Between us.
I walk out to greet
This old friend as I used to
Walked out til the water lapped
At my waist then I began to swim again.

I swam further and further out until
The shore disappeared before
Taking my final dive and
Becoming a part
Of the sea.


And soon all my memories
Are lost and forgotten.
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[Chibi Jen]

wow... what a descriptive poem! I really liked it ;D The ending of it was the most shocking.. kinda unexpected.. in the way you written it. Very pleasant to read.. yet the ending is a bit disturbing.

[Death Soldier]

I like this poem.. lots of sea images and memories... I don't know..I kinda agree with Chibi Jen....the end part makes me feel weird.. maybe I'm just crazy but..I got this impression that person who swam

"Taking my final dive and
Becoming a part Of the sea."

drowned..or something....

[Sailor Comett]

Thanks, am glad you liked it.
My intention was that they drowned, but it doesn't necessarily have to be so. Some people have told me it has an uplifting effect on them, which wasn't my original intention, but I don't mind. I like that people can make their own conclusions...

[-=-BeLf-=-]

Hi, I really liked the poem, I liked the fact that you really used detail into making us go into the scene, for example:

sailorcomett said:

[glow=darkorchid,2,300]In The Sea


Jumping and diving through waves
Breaking the surface with a loud splash
And surfacing with a wet face and a wide smile.

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Nice Poem, Keep writing more.