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Post by fireflychibi on Aug 21, 2004 21:10:11 GMT 10
this one is for my mum:
Roses are red
Violets are blue
your my mum
and i love you.
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Post by sailorfire on Aug 22, 2004 2:11:19 GMT 10
nice, but is'nt
Roses are red
Violets are blue
a cliche?
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Post by Sakura on Aug 22, 2004 2:29:57 GMT 10
lol,  sometimes I like fixing up poems too...actually, it's not a cliche...it's a poem also. ^_^" |
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Post by Chibi Jen on Aug 22, 2004 18:48:02 GMT 10
It's a cliched poem I guess..
I use to like making those "Roses r Red Violets are Blue" sorts of poems, when I wa sin primary school.
Maybe you should try writing some longer poems, and see how they turn out ^_^
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Post by Digital Leonardo on Aug 22, 2004 19:18:16 GMT 10
That can't count as your own poem... I used that on a mothers day card in grade 1... I don't think I said 'mum' I do beleive I put 'MoM'
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Post by Death Soldier on Aug 22, 2004 19:42:52 GMT 10
I guess short poems are fun and easy to make. There's a few other cliche ones, like: Roses are Red Violets are Blue I was born beautiful What happened to you Anyways, this section is for Firefly's poems, so I'll just stop here. I don't think I said 'mum' I do beleive I put 'MoM' btw Digilee, in case you didn't know, "Mum" is the Australian way of spelling "Mom". Firefly knows how to spell. |
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Post by Digital Leonardo on Aug 22, 2004 20:30:45 GMT 10
Yeah yeah I knew that^^ Digilee is not that stupid~
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Post by Sakura on Aug 23, 2004 10:11:04 GMT 10
oh, so it is a cliche?  never knew that. ^_^" lol |
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Post by fireflychibi on Aug 23, 2004 17:56:40 GMT 10
this one is about my cat:
i have a cat
she just sat
on a mat
wearing a hat.
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Post by Chibi Jen on Aug 23, 2004 18:16:24 GMT 10
That's really unoriginal, if you know what I mean ^_^;; Like I said before, try writing poems out of the square.. u know? Try writing longer ones, and by that I mean longer stanzas, verses, and lengths...
Try avoiding rhyming words, like cat-hat-mat-rat-bat...
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Post by Digital Leonardo on Aug 23, 2004 18:31:13 GMT 10
I know I am sounding rude, but that can't be yours either... tons of people have used that... a kind in my english class tried to pass that off as his own poem.
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Post by Death Soldier on Aug 23, 2004 20:25:09 GMT 10
Gotta say, you really have to come up with more original and interesting ideas It's just as bad as writing stories that end with "And I woke up and it was all a dream"..you get what I mean? Personally, I dislike your poems..can't even say they are yours. You didn't put much thought in it, it's not worth sharing... Really, you can do much better than that. Rythming poems don't have to be so short. Here's my quick attempt on writing a poem that rythmes. It's the not best poem you've every read, but at least I added something more than what you have: It was a hot sunny day I need some water, ok? I was dying of thirst My brain was about to burst Just when I was about to pop I went past an air-conditioned shop The door slid open wide “No no no”, my mind started to cry I have to pay my loan I started to groan... <you get my point?> They don't have to rythme..there's more to poetry and much more depth and meaning that can come out of it. |
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Post by Digital Leonardo on Aug 23, 2004 20:51:10 GMT 10
DS, thats kind of cute that poem^^
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Post by Blu on Aug 23, 2004 21:10:31 GMT 10
this one is about my cat: i have a cat she just sat on a mat wearing a hat. I wrote that poem... |
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Post by Death Soldier on Aug 23, 2004 21:21:32 GMT 10
I wrote that poem... lol..you are so funny Blu...not that I don't believe you or anything...  Those were the good old days.. I thought I saw those types of poems of rythme in that series of Cat-in-the-Hat  |
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sometimes I like fixing up poems too...actually, it's not a cliche...it's a poem also. ^_^"
<--Thanks ChibiJen!!
never knew that. ^_^" lol
Those were the good old days.. I thought I saw those types of poems of rythme in that series of Cat-in-the-Hat 