Hidden Affections

[Enigma]

A poem...hope you like it =)


Hidden Affections

I sit and watch from far away
My eyes have never gone astray
She sits and smiles back at me
Is this Dream or Reality
I pine and yearn for days to come
When She and I will be just one
But to this day I still don't know
Why I didn't say this long ago
"I really like you I truly do
Till the ends of time, I'll be with you"
She left so sudden, no bye or adieu
No reason to stay, I followed through
I felt so numb, my soul being drained
But Cloudless Skyz brought falling rain.

[Chibi Jen]

*claps claps* That's a very emotional poem you have here... For some strange reason.. I felt like I've read this poem somewhere before... Anyhow, I like it- I think it's written very well. Hope you post more poems

[Enigma]

thx I wrote it myself

[Enigma]

What do you think about this one I wrote...

Shattered

I've tried so much to be the one
I don't know if it can be done
I'll prove myself in anyway
I'd go to Hell and there I'll stay
I tried to talk and make her see
The value within my loyalty
To know a person such as her
There's noone else that i'd prefer
Her name breathes innocence and chastity
A Lily, a flower of infinite varieties.
To know such virtue and worth of heart
Is indeed perfected art
But in the end, I strain to see
The future between you and me.

Any good?

[Chibi Jen]

I think it's okay... but I think I like the other one better. The rhyming makes it kind of lose it's meaning. Maybe you should try not making it rhyme that much? I donno... I guess rhyming makes it more pleasant to read.. *shrugs*

[Death Soldier]

TechnoManga said:

Hidden Affections

I sit and watch from far away
My eyes have never gone astray
She sits and smiles back at me
Is this Dream or Reality
I pine and yearn for days to come
When She and I will be just one
But to this day I still don't know
Why I didn't say this long ago
"I really like you I truly do
Till the ends of time, I'll be with you"
She left so sudden, no bye or adieu
No reason to stay, I followed through
I felt so numb, my soul being drained
But Cloudless Skyz brought falling rain.

oww..this poem is so sweet ^.^ 'Cloudless skyz'...how pretty. I hope that someday she'll receive this message. I think she'll like to hear it from you...