This is not a finished poem.... it's just a whole bunch of ideas thrown together in no particular order, but I need a bit of help with it...
Preferably I'd like to write this rhyming as well, which it doesn't at the moment... I just want to know what you think, which lines you like etc... I'm going to spend a day working on it before I go back to uni... it's for someone very special to me
My heart has known no one other than you
It is unclouded by other names and faces
Should you wish to look, it would be a mere mirror to you.
How can something so strong be so fragile?
Something so solid that cannot be held for fear of breaking it.
How is it that I am so sure I love you
Yet not be able to say it in any words I have
There is no love like the one i hold for you
No one else who will hold you with the warmth I do
From the moment I laid eyes upon you
My heart was taken, there was nothing I could do
No way of explaining how lucky you make me feel
When I turn at night and see you asleep beside me
The lights of the night the only cover on
Your skin shining and enticing
The one who, with a feather touch
Makes my heart melt, my skin tingle
And my soul warm.
It's not titled yet either....
Edit: Ok here's what I have so far...
You, shining, stood before me that day
Smiled at me and chased my fears away
And when your warm hand reached for mine
You took my heart at the same time
There's no way of explaining how lucky i am
Or how proud to be out with you and not give a damn
Then when I turn at night and see you sleeping
I realise I'm so in love I want to start weeping
Your magic, your beauty, your glow and your smiles
For just a glimpse I know men who'd trek miles
And so, sometimes, I can't quite believe
This sensational beauty's coming home with me
The stars in the skies can't compare to your eyes
The full moon is dull to your shine, however it tries
And nightingales can't sing with your magical voice
Your divinity wins over, there's never a choice
And in a hundred years when time when I'm alone and I'm old
There's no one but you I'll be wanting to hold
And even when it's an age away
I know you'll feel just like that very first day