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Post by Chibi Jen on Nov 12, 2004 14:13:05 GMT 10
Really descriptive poem SC!! I like this stanze the most: Brilliantly described Good work!
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Post by Sailor Comett on Feb 17, 2005 17:28:34 GMT 10
Aww thank you *hugs* Finally a new one: RapturePlay for me again In these final moments let me watch Your beautiful white fingers gently coax The Moonlight Sonata from your old piano Hold me in rapture once more While angelic notes bind my body Clothing me in silken silver ribbons And Beethoven runs his fingers through my hair And strokes my cheeks. As the old composers are revived For one last evening together I am lost, lifted, drowned in ecstasy My heart pounds, music surging through my veins Paralysing me with powerful, precious sounds I become the music you are playing me. I can see the music flowing around me I smell the age of each note as it surrounds me Sweat forms upon your face and head Tiny crystal beads that crash to the ground. The music is slowing And so is my heart My breath becomes Slow. Short. Stopped. I am gasping for the air that used to come so easily. My world is dying, you are stopping. I hang on to the final notes before Falling forwards, breathless, dead. Oh, my melodious, rapturous angel That smelled so sweet, that felt so strong That blinded my eyes, that made me see That became my world, and undid me.
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Post by Chibi Jen on Feb 18, 2005 13:42:40 GMT 10
ahhh..I love this poem!!!!! *applause* It's very impressive stuff you've written ^____^ Great work!
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Post by Sailor Comett on Mar 20, 2005 0:10:33 GMT 10
aww thanks Jen Here's a newer one... it was just a bit of fun - not really what I usually write... we had to do a piece about a fantastical garden for Creative Writing, so, being me I twisted it as far as I could get away with and made it about the Sera Myu! It's just a silly piece, but enjoy! [glow=gold,2,300] The garden of SeraMyu is a platform With new performances each year. It has planets for plants in all colours Beauty to make you shed a tear. The third stage holds bloody vampires, Uranus and Neptune’s Saint Cry! The tantalising shape of Hikari And my sexy senshi of the sky. Pretty soldiers in sailor suits That are outsized so you can see And they sing and they dance and perform But they’re only performing for me. I could stay in this garden for ever Simply basking in their sailor sun Sometimes I wish I could join in Being perfection – that looks like fun. [/glow]
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Post by Chibi Jen on Mar 22, 2005 16:38:05 GMT 10
lol.. thats hilarious XD I can never write a good poem, let alone these type XD
YAY, go Sera Myu ^^
I really enjoyed this one.. its so..cute :3
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Post by Sailor Comett on Mar 23, 2005 2:03:33 GMT 10
lol thanks That's the third draft of it... the first two were kinda lame (the first one mentioned Pluto as the guardian of the garden gate of time... ) and didn't rhyme - so this is a rhyming mixture of the two and I handed it in as my final draft... I'd wanted to write something moonie for a while and I had a bit of a Myu day, so I finally got some inspiration...
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Post by Sakura on Mar 25, 2005 9:50:15 GMT 10
^_^" Sera Myu. XD It was actually a very good poem. I could never write something as awesome as this! Keep up the good work!
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Post by Sailor Comett on Mar 25, 2005 12:24:41 GMT 10
aww thanks Sakura! I was kinda worried that this one was gonna flop since it's so different from what I usually do, so I'm really glad that you liked it
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Post by Chibi Jen on Apr 7, 2005 11:57:22 GMT 10
hehe...feel free to experiment more different styles, and use us as a test ^^
These ones r funny...
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Post by Sailor Comett on Apr 29, 2005 22:35:41 GMT 10
Thank's Jen! This is the poem I mentioned in the bugs topic... It's not that good - I never bothered going back and polishing it or anything so this is the raw thing...
Weapons of Ant Destruction
Right, that's it, I've had enough The nasty little things have got to go I've just put down so much stuff There's no way of surviving that I know
I have amassed Weapons of Ant Destruction To deal with each evil little pest To break down their ant construction So I can finally get some rest
Because the foul things are everywhere And I hate little creatures that crawl Especially when wherever I look, they're there No, I don't like ants at all
So I have powder and pellets, liquid and spray And I'm constantly on patrol Trust me the buggers are going away I have it all under control...
You see, it needs some work doing to it, but I just wrote it and forgot about it...
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Post by Chibi Jen on May 16, 2005 20:53:57 GMT 10
..lol... never heard of a poem like this one before.. I somewhat agree, this one doesnt seem to have the same effect as your other poems.. It needs to have a better flow I think.
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Post by Sailor Comett on Jul 5, 2005 9:47:29 GMT 10
Hopefully this one's better I don't know why I didn't post this one before - it's pretty old... Love Lies BleedingMy Love lies bleeding on the cold stone floor Dying from the wounds Deception has inflicted. Scarlet betrayal and sapphire regrets Run and pool between the jagged rocks. The painful screams remind me that I forgot The game I was playing, but my Love forgot the rules, So my Love lies bleeding on the cold stone floor The remains of Passion clutched in blanching hands The childish face of guileless Innocence watches with sorrowful eyes, Takes the hand of Forgiveness and leaves. Love's sightless eyes roll wildly before closing. I drag the massive weight outside in the hope I can bury it, Drown it, lose it, overthrow it or defeat it, But Conscience puts a steady hand on my arm And helps me carry my Love back inside Where I lock myself away and nurse it back to health So we can destroy each other again.
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Post by Sakura on Jul 6, 2005 0:08:22 GMT 10
haha, "Weapons of Ant Destruction" is actually not that bad...it reminds me of the time my friends and I were outside shooting for the music video. My friend holding a camera steady next to an ant farm. XD He got so annoyed of the ants crawling around/on him, about five minutes later, my other friend takes a stick and starts scraping the ant hill...which was like a meter or two long. Then the ants just went freaking crazy! haha Anyways, yes, me go back to talking about SC's poem. Sorry. XD
"Love Lies Bleeding"...kinda seems like someone's cutting themself?
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Post by Chibi Jen on Jul 8, 2005 14:26:39 GMT 10
Love Lies Bleeding is an awesome poem. I really like this one The description shows you've put a lot thought and time into writing the poems~ and it really shows on the result. ^_^ Great job SC.
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Post by sailorfire on Jul 8, 2005 16:11:05 GMT 10
love lies bleeding made me cry... that is an awesome poem, good work! It is wonderful!
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