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Post by Sakura on Oct 4, 2004 10:40:22 GMT 10
New poem... ;D
Nothing
Nothing is the same here, People seem so different than before, Stupid things that we did there, Aren't very fun any more,
Changing everything that we had at one time been, Forgetting all the times we had, Memories that we have locked within,
Sadness all together can not measure the feel, Nobody cares about the what that is sealed, Something over taking me, No way can it help us see,
The pain locked within me, The way I didn't want to be, The old times that we remember we had, Can't believe the lifes we've lead,
Thought that friends were forever, Never thinking the friendship would ever end, Pulling each and every lever, Hoping just to have our link bend,
It didn't help in anyway, Nothing to please or to say,
Keeping in touch with those now near, Leaving behind what I held dear, Never knowing that it'd cause fear, All in all just new peers,
Nothing I'd known is here to stay, Nothing now seems to be okay,
Sometimes I feel like I'm stuck in a cage, Someone please turn the page, No one dares to help us out, Not caring what we're all about,
Laying down to think over my thoughts, Nothing can I think of except for what I've now caught, Something that'll hopefully bind, Nothing that can stay out of my mind.
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Post by Chibi Jen on Oct 4, 2004 21:32:35 GMT 10
Hey you're getting quite good at these ^_^ Hope to see more of your writing! Keep it up
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Post by sailorfire on Oct 4, 2004 22:27:20 GMT 10
wow!!!!* very good!* APPLAUSE!!! WE HAVE A VERY GOOD POET!!! EVEN BETTER THAN ME!
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Post by Sakura on Oct 5, 2004 7:54:31 GMT 10
lolz, thanx. ^_^" I've been trying....even though I still think I'm bad...lol. my poems are so....depressing, as my friend says at least.
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Post by Sakura on Dec 26, 2004 6:43:57 GMT 10
Wow, I haven't updated in a while. >.<
Anyways,
Ray of Sun
I tried talking to you the other day, You didn't even have a word to say, Another friend coaxing me to call, All you did was make me bawl,
How did it turn out this way? You were there back then almost everyday, I thought we were friends, Till the very end,
I felt as though you forgot, Who I am, and who I'm not, Something brings me to think, What was it that made us sink?
You were the one I thought would be forever true, Not the one who would make me blue, I moved on in my life, Something you should think about with strife,
We weren't meant to be the 'forever' team, Something that is only a dream, I look back to think of all the memories we had, That was something that always made me glad,
Last year I thought back to you, The day that you left me too, The something that you and I wanted to be, Something, we both just couldn't see,
I thought we had a common bind, A reason to be together, was that just in my mind? I thought what I have become today, The ray of sun that'll always be my way.
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Post by Chibi Jen on Dec 26, 2004 13:08:30 GMT 10
That's a really good poem Sakura, I enjoyed reading it I particularly liked this line: Great job
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Post by Sakura on Dec 26, 2004 15:05:27 GMT 10
That's a really good poem Sakura, I enjoyed reading it I particularly liked this line: Great job lolz, thanx. ^_^" I like that line too. Just came to me the other day, when what happened in my poem actually happened. XD
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Post by Sakura on Jan 22, 2005 12:12:57 GMT 10
A Memory
Something that needs to be left behind, But yet it is still stuck in my mind, Nothing can help me get it rid, Or help me forget what I had did,
The reason why I feel like I lack, Too much of the past, too much looking back, Feeling as though something's empty inside, Not knowing what it is, hoping it'll subside,
Trying to stay away from the stings, Flying away with darkening wings, Thinking it'll always stay with me, A left over thought, a memory.
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Post by Death Soldier on Jan 22, 2005 12:25:56 GMT 10
Referring to: A MemoryPretty good ideas you got Sakura..you're really good with the rhyming, yet it still makes sense and fits well with your expression =) I think this is a neat line
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Post by Chibi Jen on Jan 22, 2005 13:08:30 GMT 10
Thats a very sweet poem; I like it a lot yea.. I like the nice rythm(sp) to it.
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Post by Sakura on Jan 22, 2005 13:58:40 GMT 10
It actually took me a while to write this one...whether I was stuck on not being able to write a poem for about two months...XD or not, I don't know.
But thanx DS and Chibi Jen. ^_^" The praise you give wants me to write more. XD
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Post by Sakura on Sept 13, 2005 9:00:31 GMT 10
Me as Me
One wish, to be with you, Another, to have you care, But, you won't take a look at me, I'm no one, You don't even dare to stare
I wish you would want to know about me, Remember my name, But, you don't even see, Me as me
Darkness Here I am standing in the dark, Not knowing where to turn,
There's someone there, Watching me, Please hear my plea A voice cries out, "Help me find the route"
I see a light up ahead, Take a step forward like being lead, Feeling the wall, Walking down the hall,
Taking another step forward, Seeming to be getting further and further away, I pray, "Help me please find the way"
I continue to walk, Hearing no voices talk, Soon another light appears, A cry out of fear,
Walking towards that light is faster this time, Visible is a door, I've made it to the end, Yes! Finally. No more.
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Post by Chibi Jen on Sept 13, 2005 23:00:58 GMT 10
ahh... such simplicity, the essence of it just floats above the water ^^ Nice work Sakura (Only thing I'd add is that it should be 'further' not 'farther'.. I think... o.o)
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Post by Sakura on Sept 14, 2005 8:22:39 GMT 10
Thanx! XD I guess you're right. lol. I'll go change it now.
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Post by Sailor Comett on Oct 8, 2005 8:43:55 GMT 10
Re: Darkness This is really nice work! The rhyming scheme appears and disappears at will, but that's not a bad thing, it really works in this poem, shows that life isn't all rules and planned out, it actually adds to the poem!
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