lilith
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Post by lilith on Jan 17, 2005 5:17:31 GMT 10
This is the first poem that I've ever posted so I hope you like it.
Love, Love is the feeling I have for you Love I think you feel it too. Love is the feeling that runs through my vains, Love is my happiness, also my pain. Love is a word I cannot explain, Love is the feeling that runs through my vains.
Love is the world, Love is the air, Love is the feeling we all shair. A life without love, would meen nothing to me; A life without love, we would not be free.
PS. I hope you enjoid my poem.
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Post by Chibi Jen on Jan 17, 2005 9:06:52 GMT 10
Hey Lilith, really nice rythm you have to it Its very good. ^_^ Write more XD
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lilith
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Post by lilith on Jan 17, 2005 13:30:25 GMT 10
I hope you liked it. It took me a while to write it.
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Post by sailorfire on Jan 24, 2005 21:26:34 GMT 10
aside from the spelling mistakes... e.g. vains= veins shair= share meen-mean enjoid= enjoyed And as chibijen said, the rhythm of the poem is nice.
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lilith
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Post by lilith on Feb 13, 2005 10:06:50 GMT 10
Sory for the bad spelling. It's just that english is my second language and im not verry good at spelling as you can see. But thank you for the complements.
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lilith
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Post by lilith on Apr 29, 2005 10:09:09 GMT 10
This is the second poem I post so I hope you like it! We've been friends for a long time I think that's clear to see But I've never told you how I felt About our friendship, you and me Through all this time I've shared with you My trust, my secret thoughts Through all this time I've given with you My devotion and my love You've alwais been there for me You've piked me up when Im down I've done the same through all this time And given a shoulder when you neaded to cry I've given you through all this time My heart, my love, my hand I hope that you can take it I hope you'll understand So I hope you can accept The fealings I have for you I hope that you can finally take My heart which belongs to you THE END! I hope that you liked my poem! I'll try to write more! "
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Post by Chibi Jen on Apr 29, 2005 10:21:28 GMT 10
awwww...how sweet Lilith ^_^ I like it! Nice rythm to it too ^^ You should post up more of your poems, they're great stuff.
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lilith
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Post by lilith on Apr 29, 2005 10:26:36 GMT 10
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Post by Sailor Comett on Apr 29, 2005 10:32:10 GMT 10
ahh Lilith! That's so pretty !! I wonder who inspired you to write it hehe, lol It's nicely written, I liked reading it, made me think of Haruka and Michiru (but then again, most things make me think of them lol)
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lilith
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Post by lilith on Apr 29, 2005 10:51:52 GMT 10
:DThank you!! Here's another one. I wrote this poem to my best friend in the whole world. Dear Camilla, Im so happy you were born On April of the fourth Because today a blessing Came down to us on Earth I thank God for this Blessing Whose been there for me before I thank God for this blessing Whom I with my heart adore Someone whos been there for me When I'm Happy or I'm sad Someone whos been there for me To calm me when I'm mad Someone who gives me a shoulder to cry on Someone who's told mr the truth Someone who picks me up when I'm down That someone is you! I'm so happy you were born On April of the fourth Because today a blessing Came down to ME on earth. THE END! I hope you liked it!
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Post by Sailor Comett on Apr 29, 2005 11:08:36 GMT 10
aww! I really, really liked that!! It bought tears to my eyes! I have never written a poem to a friend (not a serious one anyway, lol, we swap limericks all the time!)... Did you give that to your friend on her birthday then?? That's such a sweet idea!! ah bless you! *hugs*
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Post by Chibi Jen on Apr 29, 2005 11:14:59 GMT 10
hehe.. your friend is lucky to have a wonderful friend like you ^_^
hmm.. I never write poems like this for friends either..lol
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lilith
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Post by lilith on Apr 29, 2005 11:18:47 GMT 10
Yes I did write and give the poem to my Best friend on her B-Day.*hugs SC back* Thank you!
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Post by lilith on Oct 5, 2005 7:02:49 GMT 10
I'm back!!! Sorry I haven't written in so long. I've been really busy lately. O well. Here's my latest poem. Enjoy! I want to tell you once and for all Something I've kept inside for so long All the words that had to come out I wanted to say them, scream them, and shout I love you, I love you! But I was afraid Afraid you'd deny The words I had said I've kept it inside for so long These feelings that rip me, tear me apart I hid them away in the depths of my heart I tried not to see them, but I was so wrong How could I ever hide them away? These feelings inside are just to great There so immense I don't think you know How much I'd give to have you to hold The warmth of your heart The love in your smile The way that you've moved me And turned me around Nothing you say will change the way I feel These feelings inside are just to real You don't know how much I want you to know The truth in my heart the love I bestow I love you, I love you Will you be mine I know I've been yours For a very long time.
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Post by Sailor Comett on Oct 5, 2005 8:51:42 GMT 10
awww lilith this is so sweet, yet strong at the same time! I can imagine it being a song... I love this stanza: The warmth of your heart The love in your smile The way that you've moved me And turned me around
It's pretty! Is it to anyone in particular? Well done!
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