|
Post by sailorfire on Mar 18, 2004 19:40:50 GMT 10
they say stars are eternal but are they? there is our huge bright burning sun in the day, it is a star... it is eternal, is it? many legends and myths come and go, lives exist then flicker out unexpectedly, but i believe that stars are immortal, really. i do. stars are the lights of heaven, shining high above. if you look carefully, there is love... stars are eternal... ps: um. this is not wierd, right???
|
|
|
Post by Chibi Jen on Mar 20, 2004 19:35:31 GMT 10
Interesting...
The structure is unusual... ;D It sounds a bit like you justifying soemthing. Not bad though ^^;;
|
|
|
Post by sailorfire on Mar 21, 2004 19:49:35 GMT 10
thanks for comment, chibi jen... new poem: title:happy eternity happiness in life is eternity in heaven above, give me a smile, walk a mile... see happiness in a drop of water, and watch hope flower... see happiness in a little twig or even a piece of stone... it does not do to be alone. angels are lights of hope, shining with their love! if you are alone, can you cope? you can't use a phone... their is no one. so, where is the happiness in eternity? ps: does this sound profound or silly?
|
|
Death Soldier
Dark Cosmic Moderator
The Dark Soldier
Posts: 2,386
|
Post by Death Soldier on Apr 5, 2004 20:02:16 GMT 10
hm....I've noticed your poem is more like song lyrics <no offense>
|
|
|
Post by sailorfire on Apr 23, 2004 21:37:26 GMT 10
i guess i was inspired by music....... ;D
a profound thought/poem... i guess......
|
|
|
Post by sailorfire on May 9, 2004 5:36:08 GMT 10
2 poems......limericks! 1st: a mad and ravenous cat, was seen chasing a pathetic rat, a dog saw this and was angry. within the dog's head a thought of hatred sparked fury. and that is why a dog always chases a cat! 2nd: doom is near, can you hear, the death is coming... insanity will sing! and all will fear!
|
|
|
Post by sailorfire on Jun 18, 2004 21:28:37 GMT 10
death took you away, it saddened my day. even when your body is reduced to a burning ember, i will always remember.... your memory i will cherish... i just wish, that life was not so short... but i do have support and with love, faith justice and hope, i will survive the trgedy and become stronger and wiser ps:" this is done in memory of my late grandfather... he was a good grand parent
|
|
|
Post by Chibi Jen on Jun 18, 2004 21:34:54 GMT 10
death took you away, it saddened my day. even when your body is reduced to a burning ember, i will always remember.... your memory i will cherish... i just wish, that life was not so short... but i do have support and with love, faith justice and hope, i will survive the trgedy and become stronger and wiser ps:" this is done in memory of my late grandfather... he was a good grand parent Sorry to hear about your grandfather.. I'm glad you were able to remain strong with support I just dont understand why you used the word "Justice" in it...
|
|
|
Post by sailorfire on Jul 13, 2004 20:12:03 GMT 10
i don't know... i just need a reason to justify why he died... just a few weeks before, he was perfectly alright... and then after those weeks, he died... and i was filled with so many emotions that i needed something to justify his death...
|
|
|
Post by sailorfire on Jul 16, 2004 21:25:10 GMT 10
justice is righteous, or so they say... it can be ironic;what if it is done in the name of revenge??? two wrongs don't make a right and life is full of strife; revenge can ruin a person's day revenge is evil; don't do it or you will be ruining a person's life! so, never take revenge!
|
|
|
Post by sailorfire on Aug 17, 2004 0:40:28 GMT 10
This was written last year in february or april to vent out the frustrations of being a teen.. What do i see? What do i see in the mirror, a child or an adult? Neither one, can an adult tell me, what am i now, what will i be? Oh, the realization has come like a jolt, i am a teen. Can an adult telll me, what you or they have seen? I want to be an adult but i am not mature. Enough, in my mind If i go out into the real world now, what will i find? Tell me, my reflection, is what i am thinking, part of nature, and why do all adults stand there, blinking and smiling? Don't you see that something is amiss and that i am going to fall into a dark abyss? What will i be in the future? I am not mature... Should i leave it to nature? I am a teen... Maybe when i am an adult i won't be given an insult... Maybe... i have seen things i should not have seen and been at places where i should not have been. Oh, i am a teen... So adults, tell me what you all have seen... My eyes, my senses are not blurred. Something in me, has stirred... Tell me how to be Tell me how to see Tell me how to be an adult and how to take an insult. For what i see in the mirror, is not an adult.
|
|
|
Post by Chibi Jen on Aug 19, 2004 16:31:45 GMT 10
I like the end part of that poem more than the beginning and middle. It's an interesting concept... It's kinda contradicting also, because it seems like you yourself agree you're not like an adult. So, do you want to be a teen or an adult? Sorri, I got kinda confused in the process of reading it.
|
|
|
Post by sailorfire on Aug 20, 2004 3:37:44 GMT 10
it is contradicting, because, last year, i was having so many emotions and so, i wrote this poem and these were my emotions... now reading it, i am also confused...... does that sound stupid?
|
|
Blu
Innocent Moderator
Also known as : Ari
Cagalli x Athrun
Posts: 1,053
|
Post by Blu on Aug 20, 2004 12:14:41 GMT 10
Nope - - I completely understand. Most of the genious were really of their faces on opium when they wrote their greatest works ^^ Btw. I like the poems there - - I could put actually put a beat to it in my head that kept it rather amusing ^^ Confusion is rampant! Utter Ambivalence is conveyed in your words! ((I dunno....))
|
|
Death Soldier
Dark Cosmic Moderator
The Dark Soldier
Posts: 2,386
|
Post by Death Soldier on Aug 22, 2004 19:52:59 GMT 10
death is like shadows, taking life away. How do shadows take life away?
|
|