SailorComett's Poems

[Sailor Comett]

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Daddy

Hello Dad,
Remember me?
The daughter that you'd never see
The little girl you won't watch grow,
The Young woman you'll never know.
Have you ever wondered
How your baby girl is now?
You wouldn't know me if you saw me
When we're out and around.
But I know you didn't care much
It was you who ran away
You couldn't cope with children
You were only 18 on the day.
I can't say I really miss you
I haven't thought about it
But you know you should have been there
When I needed protecting.
You don't know what you left behind
That's your loss, not mine
But I'd really like to tell you, Dad,
I'm absolutely fine.[/glow]

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[glow=darkorchid,2,300]J'ai besoin de vous (I need you)

I found it hard
To trust in you
From the start,
I wanted to know
Every word
That you told me was true.

I tried it once
I tried to love
But we were
Separated by
Different views
And several seasons

I soon found out
He lied to me
Every time,
But like a fool I
Ignored it
So all I found was hurt.

I thought the best
Days were behind
Me but I
Still have many more
To see now.
If I can stop crying.

Please take me home,
Hide me away
From the cold,
And protect me from
All the fears
I keep inside of me.

Will you love me?
And keep me safe
In a box,
Show me how to trust
Men again,
But please don’t take control.
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Black Innocence

Carved and moulded into what she is
A flawless Snow White beauty
Sits and watches with icy eyes
This little girl's no cutie.

Beauty is a useful thing
It hides all that she wishes,
Perfectly painted soft pink lips
Give deadly venom kisses.

She looks so sweet but it's all a show
Her innocence she feigns
When one man falls she will rise
To play the game again.

This rare beauty's black innocence
Leads many men astray
Each man tries to resist her but
They cannot stay away.
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Vampyre

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From under her black hair
A red glint in her dark eyes
Cold white skin, crystal clear
Small and svelte in size.

Her hair is soft as spun silk
And black as deepest night
No one was created of the same ilk
Because she is no wight.

There’s grace in her fluid movement
Her soft, unheard feet
Her technique needs no improvement
The mistress of discreet.

This pretty young thing’s a Vampyre
Although you wouldn’t think it
Right from the depths of Hells fire
She keeps their hearts as trinkets.

She chooses her victims with care
Seduces and ensnares each one,
A romantic stroll in the night air
Their heart and soul she’s won.

And so she leans in for the kiss
Her victim’s fate is sealed,
Down to his neck, he can’t resist
And the wound cannot be healed.

She tastes the blood; it’s red-hot life
Flowing down her chin
Her ice white teeth, not unlike knives
Sink deeper and deeper in.

Her victim lies limp in her arms
He is quite useless now
A weak man, succumbed to her charms
She snarls and throws him down.

Sat in a chic Parisian café,
Eyes roving round the room
As she sits looking oh so classy
Choosing someone else’s doom.
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[Chibi Jen]

[Referring to Daddy]
Aww.. this is really sad.. is it from experience? real?

It's very similar to Shy kitten's poem about her dad...


[Referring to Black Innocence]
Woah... you're really into this stuff aren't you?

It's very neat... that lady(?) is so evilish... hehee.. me likes...


[Referring to Vampire]
That is really awesome! I really enjoyed reading it... very descriptive.. -nods- yep.

Looking forward to reading more of your work! Keep it up.

[Sailor Comett]

[glow=darkorchid,2,300]yeah it's from experience. My Dad ran away and left my mum when he found out she was pregnant. I got the first couple of lines from something Robbie Williams did to his teacher, it started, "Hello Sir, remember me, the man you said I'd never be" and I kinda adopted it. [/glow]

[Death Soldier]

Referring to : Daddy

aww... this poem is so sad... your poem seems to show hatred and anger towards your father, confusion, blaming him, but then show him you don't care., but then..it seems that you do.

The last line "I'm absolutely fine. " seems to have two ways of reading it and I'm curious to find out which way you intended it to be.

1) "I'm absolutely fine." - as in "I'm fine without you and I don't need a father like you- a father without responsibilties "

OR

2)" I'm absolutely fine."- you actually care for your father, and want to let him know that his little girl is happy at the moment, and he shouldn't worry?


It must of been a hard time for you... Would you actually want to meet your father again?
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Referring to :Black Innocence
This poem reminds me of the Vampire poem you wrote. You're really good at this stuff I really enjoy reading your poems ^-^

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Referring to Vampyre
Woah! That is such an awesome poem… I love it. The description and choice of words create a whole image of her in my mind… beautiful but evil… Dark things are absorbing…

“looks can be deceiving- and dangerous”

[Sailor Comett]

Referring to Daddy Poem
I'm not sure if I'd want to meet him, I mean, he left us... But then I'd like him to see what I've managed to do without him, I mean, I'm a fairly bright girl and I'm going off to university in September, so I'd like him to see exactly what he gave up. But then, I'd probably just get mad at him and reject him, like he did us.
About that last line, it's a bit of both. I am fine without him, I didn't need and wouldn't have wanted a father like that, but I also wanted to convey the fact that I am pretty happy most of the time, even without him.

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Death said:

This poem reminds me of the Vampire poem you wrote. You're really good at this stuff I really enjoy reading your poems ^-^

thanks ;D It's really nice to hear positive comments... thank you... I'll post some more up when I have my anthology back (my english teacher still has it... lol)

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Death said:

Woah! That is such an awesome poem… I love it. The description and choice of words create a whole image of her in my mind… beautiful but evil… Dark things are absorbing…

“looks can be deceiving- and dangerous”

[glow=red,2,300]why thank you, lol. I write a lot of poetry. I start university in September and I'm going to do a creative writing course with English Literature. I want to be published one day too... Writing, for me, is a catharsis and I love the idea of looks being deceiving too...[/glow]

[Sailor Comett]

[glow=darkorchid,2,300]Creations of Constellations, Resplendence in stars


In the time before the time that is,
When I knew nothing of men or their hungry desires,
I had a pure love, a love of the heavens themselves.
A child’s wondrous eyes turned up to the deep purple sky,
So young, yet already able to name all visible constellations.
Orion, the only father figure I ever knew, shining brilliantly
In the glittering vastness above me.
Under his keen eyes, I took the Dog for a walk, played with the bears,
Joined Gemini as a temporary triplet and gazed at the amazing grace
Of Diana.
Artemis held my hand as we ascended to the moon,
There to behold the breathless beauty of the night sky,
Resplendence reflected in the eyes of the innocent.

Grounded now by experience,
The names and locations of each constellation elude me,
And although I can still star gaze like a centaur,
My feet remain firmly on the cold, hard ground.
Eyes still filled with wonder, yet invisibly marred
By the years I spent on Earth.
Fly again I suppose I never may,
But in my dreams I am with stars, holding them, bathing in their light,
Letting them fall around me, silver raindrops spilling from Heaven.
The light they radiate burned out thousands of years ago
And is as impossible to retrieve as my own childhood
When the creations of constellations fascinated me
And I was resplendent in stars.



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[Death Soldier]

Wow...that's a lovely poem. Interesting use of imagery and constellations...

[Chibi Jen]

Wow.. you're really creative! I enjoy reading your work XD Thanks for sharing them with us ;D

[Sailor Comett]

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The Angel's Sapphire

An angel stands before me
With hair of spun gold and diamond wings.
In her pale hands she holds a beautiful sapphire.
I am amazed at the sheer size of it and ask her
How she came by it.
She gives me a sorrowful smile and tells me
She holds in her hand all the tears I ever cried.
I ask what she intends to do with it,
And I learn that on the day I die, she will destroy the jewel
And only then will years of misery be broken.
I think of her every time sapphire falls from my eyes.
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[Sailor Comett]

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Poison (Atrocious Angel)

You run through my veins into my very heart,
An emerald poison, sparkling with malice
Infecting my blood, once so pure,
Changing it from ruby red to jet-black.

There was a time when I would give my life and soul
For you and in return you gave me a drop of poison,
Poison so simply desirable that I wanted more,
I embraced this slow death like a traitorous friend.

Night after night you offered the tainted cup
And time and again I accepted and drank deeply,
Like an atrocious angel I relished in the fiery feeling
It gave me, the strength and power heightened each time,

But as with all addictions I had no power at all,
I relied heavily on you for too much until I
Couldn’t bear to be parted from you and then I knew
You had infected me fully, the poison had spread and taken over.

You, with your emerald venom, jaded my view,
You made me hate; you made me feel fear for the first time,
You introduced me to foul feelings of unforgivable guilt,
Bless me Father for I have sinned

Again.
Even now there’s not a day I don’t think of you,
Not a day I don’t crave that poison I once so willingly took
And because of what you’ve done, I’d willingly take it again.

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[Chibi Jen]

Awww.. what a sweet poem...tears as a Sapphire  

But as with all addictions I had no power at all,
I relied heavily on you for too much until I
Couldn’t bear to be parted from you and then I knew
You had infected me fully, the poison had spread and taken over.

I love your description and comparison! It kinda gives me a creepy feeling about addiction.. XD

You tend to use gems; such as emerald/sapphire for comparisons, which is cool

[Sailor Comett]

lol I guess I do... I've only just noticed. Sapphire is my favourite gemstone... I always tried to draw a picture to go with the angel one, but as I cannot draw to save my life it never turned out how I wanted...

[Death Soldier]

Referring to: The Angel's Sapphire
That's a very interesting poem SC Is the angel the reflection of yourself (like AMG!)? I like how you used the imagery of the tears as a Sapphire ;D Your poems always seem to have a deeper meaning behind it! I love your poems!  

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Referring to: Poison (Atrocious Angel)

Changing it from ruby red to jet-black.

I love this comparion!

I embraced this slow death like a traitorous friend.

I love this simile, because it reflects on the idea of a "friend" giving what you want to have, yet much like a "traitor" for giving what is wrong...

You, with your emerald venom, jaded my view,
You made me hate; you made me feel fear for the first time,
You introduced me to foul feelings of unforgivable guilt,
Bless me Father for I have sinned

Your expression are really well written. You're good at this!
This poem acts as a warning for drugs and addiction- super nice poem

[Sailor Comett]

You're good at this!
This poem acts as a warning for drugs and addiction- super nice poem

  thanks   I'm speechless... ur all so nice about them, thanks ;D I'm really glad u like them

[Sailor Comett]

This was actually a piece of Creative Writing homework... we had to write a metaphor for writing and this is what I came up with...
[glow=blue,2,300]Eternal

I walk through vast eternal gardens
Full of everlasting flowers, perpetually in bloom
The undying colour ceaselessly shines, searing my senses.
Each petal is unique, each flower exceptional.

The seeds are silver, small and unformed.
They develop over time, die without nurture
Or grow resiliant, combat the cold and frost
And revel in the sun.

In their full glory they are immortalised
Pretty poison or dangerous delight.
Hundreds of silent voices in a soundless choir
Projected from immutable flowers in eternal gardens. [/glow]