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Post by Sakura on Jan 25, 2004 10:12:12 GMT 10
Tell me what you think... uh, it was my first time writing a poem...more or less, it was a song though...
Remember Me
You were always there for me, You wanted to see the day, You seemed so perfect in my eyes, The one I thought would be forever friend, I never see your face anymore, You never talk to me, You will need me at the end, To help you find your way, I'll be there to help you through...
Remember me, Friends forever, until the very end, Remember me, I've been through hardships that could never be forgotten, You're the one who helped me back then, You seemed to forget all those daring days, You always seemed so precious in my eyes, I thought you'd be with me, Forever and ever, You never thought of me...
You thought of me as a friend, How long ago was that? You always said "You're a friend." Were you serious about that? You never want to see my face, You always run away, Now I'll go away, and you can take my place, I could never be a friend, I don't think you care anymore, I should just run away!
Remember me, Friends forever until the very end, Remember me, You forgot all those daring days, you always seemed so precious in my eyes, I thought you'd be with me, Forever and ever, You never thought of me...
You were always considered my friend, Until that fateful day, What have you done to yourself? You always seemed to like me, You are now gone to me, I said that you were a pain, It was so d**n true, But I really never wanted to say it to your face, It came out anyways, (it really didn't, but I wanted it to) I don't think that you'll
Remember me, Friends forever until the very end, Remember me, You forgot all those daring days, I thought you'd be with me forever and ever, Remember me, Friends forever until the very end, Remember me, You forgot all those daring days, I thought you'd be with me forever and ever...
Remember me, Friends forever until the very end, Remember me, You forgot all those daring days, You always seemed so precious and amazing, I thought you'd be with me forever and ever... You never thought of me...
I feel like I've been forgotten, I feel like I've missed out, But you have grown to be the best you are, But, what do you think of me now......
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Post by Chibi Jen on Jan 25, 2004 14:04:02 GMT 10
Awww..it's so sweet.... I think it's pretty good...well sad too... Is this from experience, or are you analysing other people's feelings? (Does that even make sense??) Anyhow, I'm glad you started to write poems/song... hope you write more!
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Post by Death Soldier on Jan 29, 2004 19:23:19 GMT 10
Hmm..it's pretty good for a first try. (I'm never good at poems ) Did you say you wrote it as a song lyric? What song do you sing that with? You used a lot of repetition- works well for emphasis and for songs..they make it stick to your head ;D
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Post by Sakura on Jan 30, 2004 6:28:47 GMT 10
lolz. thanx. Yeah, it's from experience...lolz, this would probably sound really stupid to you, but I wrote this in my math class, got really bored. lol. But, yeah, I wrote this right after my friend kinda...left me...and Dark Soldier. Don't worry, lol. I'm not good at writing poems either. lol.
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Post by Sakura on Apr 2, 2004 10:22:14 GMT 10
New poem.. ^__^"
The Smile on My Face
You don't understand how I feel, Just so confused and out of place, I need something to seal, The smile plastered on my face,
Trickery was not my reason, For doing this to you, But, then again, there was no reason for treason, Or following you in all you do,
You still don't understand, How I feel everyday, I don't see the band, Of our friendship leading way,
There's no reason for you to pout, Cuz this is for me to cry all about, For it is not what I've done to you, But what you've done to the true me,
I don't feel the same, Nothing can I blame, I can't persisit, The way of resist,
You being away is driving me nuts, But like you've said, "There are no buts" I don't get why you're not here, I just start to cry and tear,
You believe in what you do, But can you fail in that too? You still don't understand how I feel, Crushed and forgotten, all too real,
You think I'm happy all the time, But you don't even return a dime, You see a smile upon my face, Thinking I'm thinking "What an ace!"
Maybe it's best that we've parted ways, Because you've been gone for days, Nothing sacred could break my heart, Than to see another friend, leave my cart,
It seems these days I don't know who to trust, Nothing except a whole buncha busts, They think I'm making too much of this, But this phases me more like a bliss, Even though it's not all that much, I really do feel your touch
It makes me bawl to see you there, Never did I say, "Thus do us part" It really isn't something that I could bare, Because you're fading away inside my heart,
Now I'm going on and on, But you still don't know what makes me feel, It's nothing like a food or a bon bon, Nothing like jewelry made of teal,
Now I'm thinking I'm trapped in a curse, Nothing I could think of would make it worse,
Maybe I should foremost just let it be, You never believed in what I see, Nothing I thought would be set right, I wanted to bring you into the light,
But you didn't know how I felt, Still confused and out of place, Still, the smile plastered on my face...
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Post by Sakura on Aug 11, 2004 9:28:56 GMT 10
Everything's So Different
In all you do, Your love will shine through,
No matter what the cost, Nothing will be lost,
And once you're here, Everything will be clear,
Never let me go, Nothing to control, 'Cuz Everything's so different, (3x)
To see your face, Nothing is a disgrace,
No one is your boss, Nothing to be tossed,
Never let anyone put you down...
And once you're here, Everything will be clear,
Never let me go, Nothing to control, 'Cuz Everything's so different, (3x)
Nowhere to be found, Nothing here is bound,
Good friends come and go, Nothing about it to say 'so',
Never let anyone, Put you down, Nothing is lost, You'll be found,
But Everything's so different, (3x)
'Cuz Everything's so different....
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So, what'd ya think? Okay, it s**. ^_^" It's a song, not a poem. I have a whole music sheet planned out for this song, but, the lyrics aren't that great. ^_^"
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Post by Chibi Jen on Aug 11, 2004 15:47:20 GMT 10
ooo.. I like the poem 'The Smile on My Face' it sounds similiar to the ones made by Kristine sa, with a nice touch of your own The poem.. well song, is pretty good Sakura ^_^
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Post by Sakura on Aug 14, 2004 7:03:22 GMT 10
lolz, thanx. ^_^"
Even if no one cares
I don't know what is wrong, About playin' my old continuous song,
Thinkin' I've changed somehow, Finding the truth that I had vowed,
I feel like I'm losing a friend, (again) Something I could only deal with at the end,
You were by my side, Starting from my first stride,
I miss you so much, Nothing here can satisfy my touch,
Here I see you in my dreams, Blacks and blues of sunbeams,
When you believe, Nothing will deceive, Nobody cares what wrong, or right, They want to know the long, and bright, Something waiting, it can't be there,
When you believe, you will achieve, Even if no one cares
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Post by Sakura on Aug 24, 2004 3:21:08 GMT 10
To Where You Are
There seems that there's nothing for me. Nothing I will be. Nothing that will help me, See what I want to see.
Being where is here, Missing all the things I left behind. Even with every tear, Not caring what is kind.
Never would I think, Of missing the sight of you. Needing to blink, The tears I'd never think would come true.
Seeing what is new, Knowing that I knew. Leaving what I had, All seems so sad.
Everything going just as planned, Not ever will I be gettin' banned. Nothing fun need be here, Never caring about the year.
Waiting and waiting for that special day, Knowing never will it come to stay. That special day when you know you want it to be, Never will it see the day with me.
Knowing that you are far, Just wanna be, To where you are.
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Post by Sakura on Aug 24, 2004 11:03:43 GMT 10
Somewhere I just have to be
I think I see you in the hall, But nothing's there, Nothing at all,
I wish you were here with me, I feel so blind, Nothing do I see,
Missing every moment we've had, Reminding me what's there, What's sad,
Somehow I'll make my way, Maybe even come back some day,
Never knowing what is ahead, Living the life that you have lead,
Leaving behind the memories, Knowing you'll be there for my needs,
Missing all which lead you to me, Nothing here would you want to see, Knowing you wouldn't want to be, Opening my heart may be the key,
You don't care, About the pain I endure, Nothing's there, Nothing for sure,
A friend will not say never, Even if gone forever, No matter what the need, They think with their help you will succeed,
Sometimes nobody cares to think, What may be the cause of the link, Seeing isn't always the truth, No where near to being uncouth,
It's hard to let you know, Leaving you all in tow, That here is probably right for me, Somewhere I just have to be.
--- been writing too many poems lately...i guess
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Post by Chibi Jen on Aug 24, 2004 11:39:27 GMT 10
Thanks for sharing your poems with us Sakura ^_^ I appreciate it.
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Post by Sakura on Sept 6, 2004 6:31:31 GMT 10
The Way I Wanted To Within
I blink away the tears, Feeling like something here is missing, All of a sudden all these fears, Come tumbling in not blissing,
No part of me seems around, I'm like a totally new person that is just bound, Feel like a closed up shell inside, Nothing to keep the friends by my side,
Something wrong I can't believe, All hopes were high, Nothing I want to achieve,
Now wanting to go after a new dream, Nobody cares about the days we were a team, I feel as if I've not been, The way I wanted to within,
The days seem long, Nothing here for me, Something I want is wrong, Just wait and see,
Crystal tears, Needing to overcome fears, No person inside, Wants to hide nor abide,
Keeping it real, Yet still helping me deal, No wonder I here, Find so many a tear,
Leading many to say, What you would want that day, But none of it was what you wanted, Everything seemed like you had taunted,
I'm trying to be who I want to be, Who that is, That's something I don't see, Nothing like a gentle kiss,
Now wanting to go after a new dream, Nobody cares about the days we were a team, I feel as if I've not been, The way I wanted to within.
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Post by sailorfire on Sept 6, 2004 6:53:02 GMT 10
nice:D
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Post by Sakura on Sept 6, 2004 7:00:22 GMT 10
lolz, thanx ^_^"
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Post by Chibi Jen on Sept 8, 2004 18:03:59 GMT 10
That's a nice poem you've written there Sakura ^_^, I like the rhythm you created in it
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